29.04.2006, 11:21
29.04.2006, 11:35
Hey :hi:
also, auch wenn ich "different pregnancy, different man" nicht gelesen habe *schäm* finde ich die FF wirklich klasse....
das erste kapitel war toll, wie luke mit den kindern umgeht... und die mädchen sind ja so süÃ, als sie um die tutus betteln
aber das ende macht mir ja ein bisschen angst... hoffentlich ist dem kleinen nichts passiert!
ich finde es toll, wie du beschreibst, dass sie lore so vermissen....
ok, ich fange an quatsch zu schreiben... also fazit:
ich liebe deinen schreibstil und hoffe es geht ganz bald weiter...
lg, snoopy_sun
also, auch wenn ich "different pregnancy, different man" nicht gelesen habe *schäm* finde ich die FF wirklich klasse....
das erste kapitel war toll, wie luke mit den kindern umgeht... und die mädchen sind ja so süÃ, als sie um die tutus betteln
aber das ende macht mir ja ein bisschen angst... hoffentlich ist dem kleinen nichts passiert!
ich finde es toll, wie du beschreibst, dass sie lore so vermissen....
ok, ich fange an quatsch zu schreiben... also fazit:
ich liebe deinen schreibstil und hoffe es geht ganz bald weiter...
lg, snoopy_sun
29.04.2006, 13:28
uuuuh! *freu* du hast das hier auch online gestellt *rumhüpf*
Hab das letztens schon auf ff.net gelesen und mich total gefreut, dass es ein sequel gibt:biggrin:
Natürlich ma wieder super klasse, wie immer.
und ich kann endlich FB geben...bei ff.net check ich das nämlich net
Also wie immer echt HAMMER!
Hab das letztens schon auf ff.net gelesen und mich total gefreut, dass es ein sequel gibt:biggrin:
Natürlich ma wieder super klasse, wie immer.
und ich kann endlich FB geben...bei ff.net check ich das nämlich net
Also wie immer echt HAMMER!
29.04.2006, 13:38
jeany_loverin schrieb:uuuuh! *freu* du hast das hier auch online gestellt *rumhüpf*
Hab das letztens schon auf ff.net gelesen und mich total gefreut, dass es ein sequel gibt:biggrin:
Natürlich ma wieder super klasse, wie immer.
und ich kann endlich FB geben...bei ff.net check ich das nämlich net
Also wie immer echt HAMMER!
das ist die 2. Sequel, es gab schon mal eine, die heiÃt "Being a family" und setzt ein als William 3 Jahre alt ist. Die ist auch schon komplett und bei FF.net zu lesen.
Die hier allerdings konnte ich dort noch nicht posten, weil die Seite spinnt
29.04.2006, 14:02
aaaahhaaa...Jetzt check ich das ^^ Bin heut etwas müde und verwirrt
dann hab ich bei ff.net "Being a family" gelesen.
Ok, dann jetzt Feedback zu dem Teil.
Wie immer super Geschrieben und die kleinen werden immer süÃer!
Mir tun die irgendwie voll leid, dass ihre Mom keine Zeit hat.
Und jetzt is auch noch Will weg. Oh man...
Bin echt gespannt, wie das jetzt weitergeht. Hab immer richtig freude daran die Story weiter zu lesen.
Mal wieder ein Fettes Lob!
dann hab ich bei ff.net "Being a family" gelesen.
Ok, dann jetzt Feedback zu dem Teil.
Wie immer super Geschrieben und die kleinen werden immer süÃer!
Mir tun die irgendwie voll leid, dass ihre Mom keine Zeit hat.
Und jetzt is auch noch Will weg. Oh man...
Bin echt gespannt, wie das jetzt weitergeht. Hab immer richtig freude daran die Story weiter zu lesen.
Mal wieder ein Fettes Lob!
29.04.2006, 14:16
29.04.2006, 14:32
rottie schrieb:ich frag mich, warum ich gerade dich zur pressesprecherin gemacht habe :lach:
so und nu warte ich brav auf den neuen teil... karana vor, noch ein tor... *hüstel* :biggrin:
nervt nicht mich, ich habe meine Schuldigkeit getan und den nächsten Teil schon geschrieben! Aber hab ihn bis jetzt nicht zurück...
Werd mich jetzt mal an Teil drei setzen... oder soll ich erst call my name weiterübersetzten? Ne,ich denke Teil drei ist dran, solange die Idee noch da ist!
29.04.2006, 14:58
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Wenn man vom Teufel spricht.. das neue chapter ist frisch gebetaed aus den USA zurück...
Und ich hab den Banner nochmal geändert, nach einer Diskussion mit Kasia über Augenfarben... naja egal, jedenfalls ist rechts Will und links die Zwillinge... die sich zu ähnlich sehen, ich weiÃ, aber so ähnlich sehen sie in meinem Kopf aus. Die linke ist Sara, die rechte Laila.... Will sieht übrigens original so aus wie in meiner Vorstellung... und das lustige ist der Kleine heiÃt auch noch wirklich William... egal hier ist das nächste Chapter:
Chapter 2: Piggy talk
Luke was completely panicked. Since one hour he ran through the mall looking for William. One of the saleswoman in the kids fashion store had volunteered to look after the twins. Luke had already informed the security personal at the mall and the woman at the information desk. They made announcements every ten minutes over the speakers, but William was still missing.
Luke´s first guess had been that he went to the toys store, but he hadn´t been there. Luke, knowing his son, was convinced that William ran away and wasn´t kidnapped. He knew the boy was angry at him and maybe even more angry and disappointed with his mother. Luke had wanted to drop William off at the soccer training, but then remembered that this day was parents/kids training and because Lorelai was busy and didn´t keep her promises, Luke could not go with him and had to go with the twins to the mall. Luke had asked William if he wanted to go to his training alone, but the boy had refused.
So Luke ran through the shopping center now and looked for his son. He stopped for a moment and thought about were he already had been: the toy store, the sports store, the kids fashion store, fishing supplies, ice-cream and food area. Then suddenly he had an idea. “Stupid Danes!” Luke thought and started to run again.
He arrived at the pet-shop after a few minutes and immediately walked to the area where the guineapigs could be found. And, of course, there he was, kneeling in front of the cage, talking to the pets.
“Meeko helps me always at home, you know. But my daddy forced me to come here. I don´t wanna be here. I told you about the training right? Today I should have had a training with my daddy or my parents, but mommy never has time. She only does things with the twins and Rory. Rory is my big sister. But I don´t like her. Every time she comes mommy only talks to her and we are not allowed to talk to mommy then. Rory never had a daddy who was there and so she needs mommy. But she is an adult and we are still small! She has a boyfriend and everything, but still mommy says “kiddo” to her. That´s so stupid. Mommy is stupid, too! I don´t like her anymore. She promised to buy the stupid tutus, but of course, she didn´t keep her promise and daddy has to buy them. And he does not want to buy them because he hates malls. And then he yelled at me. He always yells at me since mommy is so stupid. She is stupid to him, too, you know. He isn´t allowed either in the house when Rory comes!” William told the guineapigs and sniffed a few times. Luke had approached him slowly and quietly, wanting to hear what William was saying. He wasn´t surprised by what he heard. He had already tried to talk with Lorelai, but that was fruitless as long as she was so busy and when it came to Rory.
William was right. The second Rory showed up it still was like it was just the two of them: The famous Gilmore Girls. The twins were sometimes allowed to stay when they had a Gilmore Girls video night, like they called it, but William was always kicked out. He was a boy, it was as simple as that.
Of course, Lorelai loved her son also. Just as much as the twins.
But it seemed like she loved Rory just a bit more and William felt it. Luke tried to compensate for the lack of attention Lorelai was giving him, but now while he constantly had to look after all three, it wasn´t possible anymore.
He had had hope when Rory flew to Logan three weeks ago, but nothing changed. The time she would normally spend with her daughter, Lorelai spend now at the Inn instead.
“Hey Wil!” Luke said quietly, as not to startle him. Williams head shot around and he looked scared at his father, unsure what would come. He was even too shocked to speak. Luke kneeled down in front of him.
“Will, promise me that you will never, never ever run away again. You have no idea how scared I was! I´m running around here for one hour looking for you, I alarmed the security service and the woman at the information desk. Don´t ever do that again!” Luke said as the relieve settled in. He took William in his arms and the boy started to cry.
“I´m sorry daddy! I´m sorry!” he cried.
“Don´t cry! Just promise me not to do it again!” Luke said and pulled back, so that William had to look at him.
“I promise, daddy!” he sniffed and Luke wiped his tears away and picked him up and kissed him.
“Let´s inform the security that I found you and then pick up your sisters and go home. We´ve already been in this stupid mall way too long!”
“Have you seen the piggy over there? The black one? Isn´t it cute? It´s a lady, daddy, see...” he rambled excitedly and Luke placed another kiss at his cheek without saying anything.
They arrived at home another hour later and Luke was surprised to see Lorelai´s car in the driveway. It was only seven o´clock in the evening. He couldn´t remember a day during the last year when she had been home before nine.
The kids were tired and so was he, so he opened the back doors of the car and helped them to get out.
The found Lorelai in the living room on the phone, obviously talking to Rory.
“Hey they just arrived! Hey kids, say hi to Rory!” Lorelai said excitedly and held the phone in the direction of her kids. But the twins were too tired, William too jealous and Luke too mad to say anything. They all just looked at her, remained silent and then walked upstairs together, but not without Luke shooting her an angry glare.
Lorelai was confused and ended the call after some more minutes. She stood up and walked upstairs. She found the twins already dressed in their pajamas and tucked in, but still awake.
“Hey my babies!” she said quietly and sat down on Laila´s bed.
“Did you have a nice day, princess?” she asked her and placed a kiss on her forehead.
“Uhuh, daddy bought us tutus!” the girl smiled sleepily.
“Your daddy went to the mall with you?” Lorelai said surprised and went over to Sara´s bed.
“Yes and we ate ice-cream after daddy had found Will again!” Sara told her.
“Found Will? Where was he?” Lorelai wanted to know.
“He ran away to the piggies!” Sara said honestly and yawned.
“Well, I let you sleep now. Night you two!” Lorelai said and kissed Sara´s forehead before she walked outside and closed the door.
She couldn´t believe it! What had Luke been doing at the mall? And how could he lose William?And how could William dare to run away? Lorelai felt the anger building up in her chest and walked over to her sons bedroom.
Luke was sitting on William´s bed reading out a story for him, like he did every night.
“How could you dare to run away?” Lorelai asked William upset, interrupted Luke and startled them both.
“Didn´t we tell you a thousand times not to run away? I can´t believe it! No more soccer training for you this month, I swear! I´m very disappointed in you!” she lectured William and his eyes teared up.
“Lorelai, leave it, I already took care of it!” Luke told her before she could go on.
“And you don´t worry, you will go to your training! One missed training is enough, huh?” Luke winked at William and tried to calm him. Then he closed the book, kissed him good night, switched off the lights, pushed Lorelai out the door and closed it. Then he walked to their bedroom, grabbed his clothes and went into the bathroom to change, followed closely by Lorelai, who was now more angry than before.
She just burst into the bathroom, slammed the door shut behind her and started to yell.
“First you lose our son at the mall and now you question my authority in front of him?What the hell are you thinking? Is buying him ice-cream a new secret way to punish him for running away? When I imagine what could have happened! You know that he goes with everyone, thanks to this nice little town and it´s crazy inhabitants! He trusts everyone, how could you leave him without supervision? I mean here it is no problem, but at the mall? I nearly had a heart-attack when Sara told me that Will ran away. And then you didn´t even bother calling me! What if you hadn´t found him? And what were you doing at the mall anyway? I thought you hated malls, they make you uncomfortable and sick and...”
“I was at the mall because you promised the twins weeks ago that you would buy them their stupid pink tutus they need for their ballet-classes! But because you didn´t keep your promise, again I might add, and then hung up on Laila because Rory was calling, I had to go with them! And, if that wasn´t enough, it´s the stupid parents day at Wills soccer training, which he couldn´t join, because none of his parents had time, so he refused to go, so I had to take him with me to the mall, where of course I lost it, because I hate malls,and yelled at them so he ran to the guinea-pigs to tell them how stupid and unfair his parents are! And you know what? He is right! He should have been at the soccer training and I should have been there with him! Just as you should have gone to buy this tutus with your daughters!” Luke yelled back, stormed out of the bathroom and slammed the door shut behind him.
Lorelai needed some time to process Lukes angry rant and then followed him outside. She found him downstairs in front of the TV with a beer in his hands.
“Luke, I didn´t mean to yell at you! I was just so shocked when I heard that Will had gone MIA at the mall. I`m sorry for not keeping my promise, but I´m just so busy at the moment. Please Luke, I´m sorry, I really am!” she said and sat down beside him, lay her head on his chest and hugged him.
Luke took a deep breath and then slung his arms around her, stroked her hair for some seconds.
Then he placed a kiss on her forehead, untangled from her and stood up.
“You don´t need to tell me that. Tell the kids and don´t make promises all the time which you can not keep!” he said and walked upstairs into the bedroom, leaving her alone in the living-room.
TBC
Wenn man vom Teufel spricht.. das neue chapter ist frisch gebetaed aus den USA zurück...
Und ich hab den Banner nochmal geändert, nach einer Diskussion mit Kasia über Augenfarben... naja egal, jedenfalls ist rechts Will und links die Zwillinge... die sich zu ähnlich sehen, ich weiÃ, aber so ähnlich sehen sie in meinem Kopf aus. Die linke ist Sara, die rechte Laila.... Will sieht übrigens original so aus wie in meiner Vorstellung... und das lustige ist der Kleine heiÃt auch noch wirklich William... egal hier ist das nächste Chapter:
Chapter 2: Piggy talk
Luke was completely panicked. Since one hour he ran through the mall looking for William. One of the saleswoman in the kids fashion store had volunteered to look after the twins. Luke had already informed the security personal at the mall and the woman at the information desk. They made announcements every ten minutes over the speakers, but William was still missing.
Luke´s first guess had been that he went to the toys store, but he hadn´t been there. Luke, knowing his son, was convinced that William ran away and wasn´t kidnapped. He knew the boy was angry at him and maybe even more angry and disappointed with his mother. Luke had wanted to drop William off at the soccer training, but then remembered that this day was parents/kids training and because Lorelai was busy and didn´t keep her promises, Luke could not go with him and had to go with the twins to the mall. Luke had asked William if he wanted to go to his training alone, but the boy had refused.
So Luke ran through the shopping center now and looked for his son. He stopped for a moment and thought about were he already had been: the toy store, the sports store, the kids fashion store, fishing supplies, ice-cream and food area. Then suddenly he had an idea. “Stupid Danes!” Luke thought and started to run again.
He arrived at the pet-shop after a few minutes and immediately walked to the area where the guineapigs could be found. And, of course, there he was, kneeling in front of the cage, talking to the pets.
“Meeko helps me always at home, you know. But my daddy forced me to come here. I don´t wanna be here. I told you about the training right? Today I should have had a training with my daddy or my parents, but mommy never has time. She only does things with the twins and Rory. Rory is my big sister. But I don´t like her. Every time she comes mommy only talks to her and we are not allowed to talk to mommy then. Rory never had a daddy who was there and so she needs mommy. But she is an adult and we are still small! She has a boyfriend and everything, but still mommy says “kiddo” to her. That´s so stupid. Mommy is stupid, too! I don´t like her anymore. She promised to buy the stupid tutus, but of course, she didn´t keep her promise and daddy has to buy them. And he does not want to buy them because he hates malls. And then he yelled at me. He always yells at me since mommy is so stupid. She is stupid to him, too, you know. He isn´t allowed either in the house when Rory comes!” William told the guineapigs and sniffed a few times. Luke had approached him slowly and quietly, wanting to hear what William was saying. He wasn´t surprised by what he heard. He had already tried to talk with Lorelai, but that was fruitless as long as she was so busy and when it came to Rory.
William was right. The second Rory showed up it still was like it was just the two of them: The famous Gilmore Girls. The twins were sometimes allowed to stay when they had a Gilmore Girls video night, like they called it, but William was always kicked out. He was a boy, it was as simple as that.
Of course, Lorelai loved her son also. Just as much as the twins.
But it seemed like she loved Rory just a bit more and William felt it. Luke tried to compensate for the lack of attention Lorelai was giving him, but now while he constantly had to look after all three, it wasn´t possible anymore.
He had had hope when Rory flew to Logan three weeks ago, but nothing changed. The time she would normally spend with her daughter, Lorelai spend now at the Inn instead.
“Hey Wil!” Luke said quietly, as not to startle him. Williams head shot around and he looked scared at his father, unsure what would come. He was even too shocked to speak. Luke kneeled down in front of him.
“Will, promise me that you will never, never ever run away again. You have no idea how scared I was! I´m running around here for one hour looking for you, I alarmed the security service and the woman at the information desk. Don´t ever do that again!” Luke said as the relieve settled in. He took William in his arms and the boy started to cry.
“I´m sorry daddy! I´m sorry!” he cried.
“Don´t cry! Just promise me not to do it again!” Luke said and pulled back, so that William had to look at him.
“I promise, daddy!” he sniffed and Luke wiped his tears away and picked him up and kissed him.
“Let´s inform the security that I found you and then pick up your sisters and go home. We´ve already been in this stupid mall way too long!”
“Have you seen the piggy over there? The black one? Isn´t it cute? It´s a lady, daddy, see...” he rambled excitedly and Luke placed another kiss at his cheek without saying anything.
They arrived at home another hour later and Luke was surprised to see Lorelai´s car in the driveway. It was only seven o´clock in the evening. He couldn´t remember a day during the last year when she had been home before nine.
The kids were tired and so was he, so he opened the back doors of the car and helped them to get out.
The found Lorelai in the living room on the phone, obviously talking to Rory.
“Hey they just arrived! Hey kids, say hi to Rory!” Lorelai said excitedly and held the phone in the direction of her kids. But the twins were too tired, William too jealous and Luke too mad to say anything. They all just looked at her, remained silent and then walked upstairs together, but not without Luke shooting her an angry glare.
Lorelai was confused and ended the call after some more minutes. She stood up and walked upstairs. She found the twins already dressed in their pajamas and tucked in, but still awake.
“Hey my babies!” she said quietly and sat down on Laila´s bed.
“Did you have a nice day, princess?” she asked her and placed a kiss on her forehead.
“Uhuh, daddy bought us tutus!” the girl smiled sleepily.
“Your daddy went to the mall with you?” Lorelai said surprised and went over to Sara´s bed.
“Yes and we ate ice-cream after daddy had found Will again!” Sara told her.
“Found Will? Where was he?” Lorelai wanted to know.
“He ran away to the piggies!” Sara said honestly and yawned.
“Well, I let you sleep now. Night you two!” Lorelai said and kissed Sara´s forehead before she walked outside and closed the door.
She couldn´t believe it! What had Luke been doing at the mall? And how could he lose William?And how could William dare to run away? Lorelai felt the anger building up in her chest and walked over to her sons bedroom.
Luke was sitting on William´s bed reading out a story for him, like he did every night.
“How could you dare to run away?” Lorelai asked William upset, interrupted Luke and startled them both.
“Didn´t we tell you a thousand times not to run away? I can´t believe it! No more soccer training for you this month, I swear! I´m very disappointed in you!” she lectured William and his eyes teared up.
“Lorelai, leave it, I already took care of it!” Luke told her before she could go on.
“And you don´t worry, you will go to your training! One missed training is enough, huh?” Luke winked at William and tried to calm him. Then he closed the book, kissed him good night, switched off the lights, pushed Lorelai out the door and closed it. Then he walked to their bedroom, grabbed his clothes and went into the bathroom to change, followed closely by Lorelai, who was now more angry than before.
She just burst into the bathroom, slammed the door shut behind her and started to yell.
“First you lose our son at the mall and now you question my authority in front of him?What the hell are you thinking? Is buying him ice-cream a new secret way to punish him for running away? When I imagine what could have happened! You know that he goes with everyone, thanks to this nice little town and it´s crazy inhabitants! He trusts everyone, how could you leave him without supervision? I mean here it is no problem, but at the mall? I nearly had a heart-attack when Sara told me that Will ran away. And then you didn´t even bother calling me! What if you hadn´t found him? And what were you doing at the mall anyway? I thought you hated malls, they make you uncomfortable and sick and...”
“I was at the mall because you promised the twins weeks ago that you would buy them their stupid pink tutus they need for their ballet-classes! But because you didn´t keep your promise, again I might add, and then hung up on Laila because Rory was calling, I had to go with them! And, if that wasn´t enough, it´s the stupid parents day at Wills soccer training, which he couldn´t join, because none of his parents had time, so he refused to go, so I had to take him with me to the mall, where of course I lost it, because I hate malls,and yelled at them so he ran to the guinea-pigs to tell them how stupid and unfair his parents are! And you know what? He is right! He should have been at the soccer training and I should have been there with him! Just as you should have gone to buy this tutus with your daughters!” Luke yelled back, stormed out of the bathroom and slammed the door shut behind him.
Lorelai needed some time to process Lukes angry rant and then followed him outside. She found him downstairs in front of the TV with a beer in his hands.
“Luke, I didn´t mean to yell at you! I was just so shocked when I heard that Will had gone MIA at the mall. I`m sorry for not keeping my promise, but I´m just so busy at the moment. Please Luke, I´m sorry, I really am!” she said and sat down beside him, lay her head on his chest and hugged him.
Luke took a deep breath and then slung his arms around her, stroked her hair for some seconds.
Then he placed a kiss on her forehead, untangled from her and stood up.
“You don´t need to tell me that. Tell the kids and don´t make promises all the time which you can not keep!” he said and walked upstairs into the bedroom, leaving her alone in the living-room.
TBC
29.04.2006, 15:20
29.04.2006, 20:24
rottie schrieb:ich frag mich, warum ich gerade dich zur pressesprecherin gemacht habe :lach:weil ich immer tolle antworten gebe...ich kann halt nur nicht so oft nen gutes FB abgeben :o
also, mir hat das kapitel wieder gefallen
es war wieder toll geschrieben, ich hab wieder verstanden worum es geht, also ist es selbst für zwerge nen verständlicher text und die idee find ich auch toll
luke is nen toller daddy
und lore...joa im augenblick mag ich sie nicht so...find blöd, dass sie die anderen vernachlässigt nur rory nicht
bin schon aufs nächste kapitel gespannt