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What's when the love never ending? (JJ&Lit.)
JamieA
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08.04.2005, 22:48
also du wolltest ja meine ehrliche meinung....here we go...
1. leg dir bitte einen beta reader zu. Der Text wimmelt nur so von rechtschreibfehlern....
2. Könntest du vllt bei der wörtlichen Rede eine neue Zeile anfangen wenn die Person wechselt? dann würde es viiiiiiieeeeeel übersichtlicher werden...
3.Ach ja noch was, was mich schrecklich erschreckt hat, als ich s gelesen habe.... Schreib Logan bitte bitte bitte mit "a"....
4.Inhaltlich war er ok.

Sei mir bitte nicht böse. Ich will dir nur helfen...
lg JamieA


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What's when the love never ending? (JJ&Lit.) - von basiaGG - 08.04.2005, 23:09
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