[Lauren132]

Endlich habe ich deine neue FF gelesen!
Du bist genau so gut, wie ich dich von der ersten Story her kenne. In deutsch hätte die Geschichte wirklich keinen Stil gehabt. Ich fand es gut, dass du sie in englisch ins Forum gestellt hast. (Kannst du öfters machen )
Richtig putzig fand ich das hier:

>He grinned at her. ‘Lorelai?’
‘Yeah?’
‘I want one.’
‘What?’
‘I want to have a kiss from you.’
‘What? Why?’
‘I’m kidding.’
‘Oh yeah yeah, right. I know.’
‘No you don’t. You have had this face, like you were surprised.’
‘No I hadn’t .’
‘Yes you had.’
‘Oh no mister. You said you wanted to kiss me.’
‘Right, I would like to have one kiss from you.’
‘But you said you were kidding.’
‘So, I was kidding about the kidding.’
‘I.. I..’
‘Lorelai relax. It was just a joke.’
‘Pretty weird jokes, we have here.’
‘Really? You sounded a little bit nervous.’
‘I sounded..? Oh no don’t come up with this mind-reading thing of yours..’
‘What?’
‘Mixing up the words I said.’
‘I only tell you what I have heard.’
‘I didn’t lose anything about being nervous.’
‘You were acting nervous.’
‘No I didn’t.’
‘Yes you did.’
‘No I did not, because there is no reason to be nervous. And completely not, if it concerns to kiss you. It’s not a big deal. Really.’
‘Yeah?’ He smiled amused.
‘Of course not.’
He kissed her. Lorelai pushed back.
‘Luke? What’s wrong with you?’
‘What? You said it wasn’t a big deal.’
‘And that gives you permission to kiss me without any warning?’
‘Why not. You are a beautiful woman. We are friends and you sounded nervous when I asked you to kiss me.’
‘I.. I’m far away from being nervous because of you?’
‘You are nervous because of me? I thought you’ve been nervous about the kiss?’
‘I’m not nervous because of you.’
‘You are. There is still this face.’
'Forget the face.'
‘You realized it, too?’
‘Realized what?’
‘Your face.’
‘Luke! Stop it!’
Luke smirked at her.<

Wenn du fertig mit schreiben bist, musst du deine längere FF auf jeden Fall ins Forum stellen!!abber: Verspoiler sie nach Lust und Laune, ich würde sie lesen!!:biggrin:

Vlg lauren