16.08.2006, 16:43
Hello Cedric!
For a long time i´ve read very often the fancifiction part in the forum and what can I see this afternoon? An english fanfiction about my favorite couple! Great!
Your beginning of the story is good, your style in my opinion also good and readable...i can see the characteres play, nearly live..i hope, you write more!
But, one note. It´s possible to write the dialogues in the next line? It´s better to read, you know? But you can do this also in your one way...
greets and I hope you understand my bad english...*laugh*
lila
For a long time i´ve read very often the fancifiction part in the forum and what can I see this afternoon? An english fanfiction about my favorite couple! Great!
Your beginning of the story is good, your style in my opinion also good and readable...i can see the characteres play, nearly live..i hope, you write more!
But, one note. It´s possible to write the dialogues in the next line? It´s better to read, you know? But you can do this also in your one way...
greets and I hope you understand my bad english...*laugh*
lila
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