[ChrissiTine]

Also erstmal muss ich sagen, dass dieses Bild sehr gut gemacht ist, ich hätte keine Ahnung, wie ich das so hinkriegen soll, ich bin schon froh, dass ich das jetzt so hinkriege, wie du es gesehen hast.

Also als Spoiler würde ich das nicht wirklich bezeichnen, das wird ja schon nach drei Kapiteln klar. Eine sehr interessante Wendung, die diese FF nimmt, sowas wäre mir nie eingefallen, ich bin gespannt, wie du das machen wirst.

[jeany_loverin]

Das Bild is cool! hmmm...
Die eine kleine auf dem Bild unten links, sieht aus wie ich, als ich klein war, nur dass ich dunklere Haare hatte ^^
Wird ja wohl noch richtog spannend...man man...bin icht mal gespannt!

[Emerson Rose]

Super Teile. Ich habe sie eben in einem Rutsch gelesen.

Und so auf Anhieb würde ich sagen, Lore ist ne Rabenmutter. Na ja vielleicht zu hart ausgedrückt, aber sie verlässt sich total auf Luke. Unter dem Motto, ich habe 16 Jahre lang eine Tochter allein groß gezogen, jetzt bist du mit den dreien dran.

Dass William da so reagiert ist nachvollziehbar. Das ist ohnehin ein nicht ganz unkompliziertes Alter, wo die Kids genau merken, wer auf sie eingeht, ihnen zuhört und für sie da ist. Und er merkt ganz genau, dass Lore wenig da ist, kaum Zeit für ihn hat und ihn unabsichtlich sogar ausgrenzt, wenn die obligatorischen Video-Abende stattfinden.

Was nun mit Rory und Logan war habe ich nicht ganz kapiert, nur dass Lore zu ihnen fahren will. Da bin ich ja mal gespannt, wie es weitergeht.

LG Emerson Rose

PS: Und das selbstgebastelte Bild ist auch klasse geworden.

[rottie]

karana, wow! die story nimmt eine, wie mir vorkommt, bekannte wendung. es erinnert etwas an die anderen teile, wo es eben auch zu konflikten kam, nur sind diesmal die rollen vertauscht - wenn ich mich recht entsinne.
ich bin gespannt wie lore sich der situation stellt und was noch alles passiert. wobei ich sagen muss, dass mir die kids schon richtig leid tun :heul:

[karana]

Okay, war heute früh wieder fleißig, auch dieses Chapter ist NICHT gebetaed....
Und was die bekannte Wendung angeht:

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Spoiler Es werden nicht Luke und Lorelai sein, die sich dauerhaft die Köpfe einhauen. Das Problem ist dieses Mal fünf Jahre alt, hat ein unglaubliches Temperament und ist ziemlich verletzt

Chapter 4: Have a nice trip


“Luke! Luke!” she called him and hurried into the twins room.
“Would you be quiet! Sara isn´t feeling well and Laila is asleep, not that you would care!” Luke hissed and stroked Sara´s wet curls from her forehead.
“Luke that´s not fair! I love my the kids, but Rory needs me!”
“I told you to be quiet! We won´t get into this right here. Not in front of the kids!” he said and tried to keep quiet and calm, while inside he was fuming.
He waited until Sara was asleep again and then walked back into the bedroom where Lorelai had finished packing.

“You already made up your mind, so what did you want to talk about?” he asked.
“I want you to understand why I need to fly over to London. I don´t want you to be mad at me, what you obviously are!” she said and crossed her arms in front of her chest.
“You know I can´t remember a single occasion during the last year when it was important if I understand or tolerate your actions. And that´s okay, it´s just me! It´s not important if I understand. But what is important is that the kids don´t understand anymore. They don´t understand why their mother is sitting in her hotel all day long without stopping by for dinner. They can´t understand why she breaks one promise after the other! You know for me it is important that Laila cries at night because she wants her mommy, but you´re not there. It´s important that Sara doesn´t even ask anymore when you come home. And William, geez Lorelai, you saw him! Doesn´t that get you thinking? Doesn´t that make you sad when your own son rejects you?” Luke asked loudly.
“Of course it hurts! It hurts like hell when your kids and your husband hate you!”
“Ah god, don´t be such a drama queen and don´t pity yourself! You know that we don´t hate you. Although when it comes to Will, I would say give him two more years and you´re right. You have no right to complain! You were the one who rejected him first! You have favorites! You´re favorite daughter is Rory and she is unreachable for our kids. Then some miles after comes Laila, then Sara. And then when you can not think of anything else to distract yourself with, then comes Will. You make that boy hate his own sister. He hates Rory, Lorelai! And you made him do that. So please don´t drown in self-pity! You chose Rory over the others again this time. She is a grown woman, she is 26 years old, for gods sake, she does not need you anymore! When you were her age you had a ten year old kid! But here down the hall are your two other daughters lying sick in bed, which you didn´t even know for four days. They are lying there for four days already and you were too busy to notice! But that wasn´t shocking for anyone of us, because it has been this way for one year. But while you don´t have time for your sick daughters and your son who could really use some of your attention, you have time to fly to London and hold Rory´s hand while she is wallowing about Logan? Go next door and try to get your son´s respect and trust back! But don´t stand here and want me to understand and help! You made your bed, now lie in it!” Luke yelled and was out of breath when he finished his speech.
Lorelai was crying again, but she knew that Luke wouldn´t soothe her this time. And he was right, she knew it. But the other part of her knew that Rory needed her now. She was her mother, she needed to be there for her.
“You know, our kids always have parents. You are here. Rory only has me. I need to be there for her now!” she sobbed.
“No, obviously our kids only have a father, because their mother disappeared a year ago!” Luke said quietly and walked downstairs to start cooking.


“Luke don´t walk away from me! We´re not finished!” Lorelai said and followed him once again.
“I said everything I have to say!” he replied, much calmer now that he had gotten everything off his chest. He was standing in the kitchen now, leaning against the counter, his arms crossed in front of his chest, while she stood next to him, clutching the counter with one hand.
“I know that you have every right to be mad at me and I know that I didn´t have time for you during the last year. But this is getting to me, too! I miss you and I miss our kids, so much! I want to be there, I don´t wanna miss everything! Luke, on every birthday the last year I sat alone in my office crying my eyes out, because I wanted to be here and celebrate with you and not just come home when you´re already asleep and eat the last piece of cake. But I don´t know how to change it, I don´t! With all the guest at the Inn, I had to be there. And then Logan is sent to London again and Rory needed me. I feel like I have to divide myself in several pieces to get everything done, but I´, failing!I don´t know what to do, Luke!” she cried. Luke remembered another conversation when she had used the exact words. But this time he couldn´t object. She was right: She was failing and their whole family together with her. He could only advise her what to do.
“Hire more help at the Inn” he said as if it was the most obvious thing in the world.
“We can not afford it” she disagreed.
“Lorelai, you added two more buildings, hired another chef, two more people for the counter, around twelve new staff guys and you can´t afford a help for you? Then there is obviously a problem concerning the priorities. ” Luke was sceptical.
“I don´t trust anyone with it. This hotel was my dream, I couldn´t stand when anybody would ruin it!”she said and wiped her tears away, tried to get back her composure.
“Sookie had to learn it, too. You forced her, because she needed to learn it. She couldn´t do the work all by herself anymore and obviously neither can you.” Luke said calmly and took her free hand in his.
“I will think about it. But about the other thing: Rory needs me. Logan obviously cheated on her again and she found a letter. I need to fly to London and be there for her.”
“Lorelai if the situation would be different I would say: Fly. I mean, I have everything covered it´s not like it would change anything if you come home late at night and leave in the early morning hours or not. I would miss you sleeping next to me, yes, but I´m talking about the kids and their routine now. But I am really really worried about William and I wanted to talk to you about it for quiet some time now: You reject him, you don´t do anything with him: You have your “girls only”- rule and it´s fine by me, I don´t wanna watch all these crappy movies, but it hurts Will. He was jealous of Rory and the twins right from the start, but we always could handle it. But now it´s just me and the compensation I gave him for your lack of attention is gone now. I don´t have the time anymore to do things just with him, because I have to look after all three all the time. The car thing was a payback. He held up a mirror in front of you, and showed you what you´re doing to him. Showed you how you hurt him. And, honestly, I can understand him. But what worries me most is that he gets more and more aggressive towards others : He constantly fights with the kids at school, he insults them and hits them. His teacher called me three times, only during the last week. Your mother realizes it, too. He misses you! And if you´re flying to London now I´m afraid that will be the last drop and I´m not sure you could be able to work it out with him.” he told her and she looked at him with big scared eyes.
“I don´t wanna lose my son! I wann hold him close and cuddle him like I did when he was a baby. But he is so distant. He threw me out of his room this afternoon and when I wanted to watch TV with him, he didn´t say a single word.” she sobbed and still tried to fight the tears.
“Fly to London and your chance is gone. Your´s and Rory´s” Luke said and pulled her close, held her until she calmed down.


“You´re the most amazing husband. Why do you even bother to put up with me?” she asked some minutes later, when she had calmed down.
“Because you´re my wife and I love you” Luke just said.
“I love you, too. I hope you know that!” she asked, still looking scared.
“I do know that!” he smiled. She looked up and kissed him very intense, but slow and romantic, then settled back in his arms for some moments.
“I think I will go and talk to Will. Is he still in the living-room?” she asked.
“No, I send him upstairs. I don´t want him to sit the whole day in front of the TV and watch this crap!” Luke said. She gave him another peck and walked upstairs.




“Hey sweety, what are you doing?” she asked after she had knocked on the door, without getting an answer. She found him asleep on the floor, surrounded by his toys and Meeko sleeping on top of him. She took the guinea-pig and placed it in it´s cage quietly, then sat down on the floor beside her son. She let her fingers glide through his hair, traced the lines of his face with one finger, then scooped him up in her arms carefully and held him close. She breathed him in like she had done it when he had been a baby and placed soft kisses on his cheek. Luke was right, she hadn´t done that for too long. She could´t even remember the last time she had done that. With the twins she sometimes did it when she came home at night and they were asleep already, but not with William. She didn´t know why, because now that she had him in her arms again it hit her how much she had missed him.
“I´m so sorry my baby! So so sorry!” she whispered while she showered his face with kisses. How could she neglect and reject her son? She couldn´t find an answer.
“God, Will, what kind of mother have I been? I love you so much, my boy!” she whispered.
“Mommy?” his sleepy voice asked.
“I´m here honey, I´m here!” she said and tried to rock him back to sleep, but William was awake now and struggled to get out of his mothers arms.
“Where is Meeko?” he wanted to know.
“I put him in his cage, because you were both asleep!” she smiled. William walked towards the cage and opened it again, but the guinea-pigs in there just yawned and kept sleeping.
William eyed his mother sceptically. Lorelai knew this look, he had it from Luke. He was debating what he should do.
“I´m here to apologize,Will. I know that I didn´t have time for you and that I hurt you and I want you to know how sorry I am!” she said, but he didn´t say anything.
“You know it´s not easy for me with the Inn and your sisters. I´m so busy that I can´t think straight. And now that Rory is in London and wants me to come , it´s just too much and I neglected all three of you, but you especially and I want to tell you that I´m sorry and that I will try everything to change that in the future.” she said, lay her hands on his back and pulled him closer so that he was standing directly in front of her.
“Are you going?” he asked while she stroked a strand of hair from his forehead,
“What?” she asked confused and stilled her hand.
“Are you going to London?” he asked more clearly now.
“I don´t know yet. I haven´t decided” she said honestly.
William jumped back from her, his eyes changed to dark blue and his lower lip was trembling with rage.
“Go away! Go to London and the stupid Rory!” he yelled.
“William!” Lorelai exclaimed shocked.
“I hate you! Get out of my room! I hate you! I hate you!” he yelled again, leaned over and started to throw his toy cars in his mother´s direction.
“William stop it!” Lorelai yelled back and took the toy cars out of his hands. But the boy raged and startet to hit and kick his mother.
“I hate you! I hate you!” he screamed again and again until Lorelai let go of him and fled out of his room. She heard some things crash into the door behind her and took a step back from the door, took a deep breath. She ran down the stairs into the kitchen where Luke was still cooking.
“Geez, what did you do up there? Wrestling?” Luke joked and didn´t turn around, so he was oblivious to the state his wife was in.
“I´m flying to London tomorrow morning. It doesn´t matter anymore: he already hates me!” she said and Luke spun around. He saw her biting her lower lip and her determined look.
“Have a nice trip!” was all he said before he turned to the food again.


TBC

[snoopy_sun]

ok, ich bin geschockt

der teil war total traurig :heul: und sie haben mir wirklich alle leid getan, vor allem will und sogar lore... aber ich verstehe ja echt nicht, warum sie fliegt (dazu sag ich weiter unten noch was)

“No, obviously our kids only have a father, because their mother disappeared a year ago!”

den satz fand ich aus irgendeinem grund total toll.. er war soo wahr und auch so *wort such* kA... ernüchternd...
mir tut irgendwie lore leid, weil sie jetzt endlich erkannt hat, was sie falsch gemacht hat...
aber luke er ist so toll, vor allem den zwillingen gegenüber. aber ich glaube nicht, dass ich - wenn ich er wäre - wirklich ein jahr lang nichts gesagt hätte und lore einfach weiter arbeiten gelassen hätte
(ok, das ist vllt nicht deutsch, aber egal)

“Are you going?” he asked while she stroked a strand of hair from his forehead,
“What?” she asked confused and stilled her hand.
“Are you going to London?” he asked more clearly now.
“I don´t know yet. I haven´t decided” she said honestly.
William jumped back from her, his eyes changed to dark blue and his lower lip was trembling with rage.
“Go away! Go to London and the stupid Rory!” he yelled.
“William!” Lorelai exclaimed shocked.
“I hate you! Get out of my room! I hate you! I hate you!” he yelled again, leaned over and started to throw his toy cars in his mother´s direction.
“William stop it!” Lorelai yelled back and took the toy cars out of his hands. But the boy raged and startet to hit and kick his mother.
“I hate you! I hate you!” he screamed again and again until Lorelai let go of him and fled out of his room.

da hat mir will ja echt leid getan... aber ich kann echt verstehen, dass er lore angeschrien hat und ihr gesagt hat, dass er sie hasst

lore fand ich dann wirklich doof: einerseits verstehe ich natürlich, dass rory sie braucht aber andererseits:
zuerst hat sie ein jahr lang nicht zeit für ihre kinder und ihren mann wegen dem stress im hotel, dann ruft einmal rory an und schon ist das alles kein problem mehr und sie kann natürlich sofort weg
also ich verstehe, dass sie fliegt, aber damit verletzt sie die zwillinge, will und luke noch mehr und daher würde ich es ja besser finden, wenn sie bleibt

also fazit: ein toller teil (auch ohne betareader) und du bist wirklich unglaublich gut in englisch, oder? *g* der schreibstil war wie immer toll und auch die ganze storyline
freue mich ja schon auf den nächsten teil

lg, steffi

[karana]

Ich war immer ganz gut in Englisch, ja, hatte LK-Englisch und ganz gut abgeschnitten im Abi.
Und jetzt an der Uni hab ich etwa 50% aller Vorlesungen auf Englisch, weil unsere Dozenten fast alle Ausländer sind.

Ich werd mich mal zu Lorelais und Lukes Verhalten noch nicht äußern, mal sehen was die anderen schreiben. je nachdem werd ich dann was dazu sagen weshalb ich sie handeln lasse wie sie handeln... mal sehen

[ChrissiTine]

Mir hat der Teil gut gefallen, mir gefällt es immer, wenn du Auseinandersetzungen zwischen Lore und Luke schreibst und alles auf den Tisch bringst, was wir uns als Leser sowieso schon denken.

Lore tut mir Leid, aber sie ist ja selber schuld, wenn sie alles alleine machen will und nie Zeit hat und selbst wenn dann nur für Rory oder höchstens mal die Zwillinge. Und dann wundert sie sich, warum Will sie hasst, also wirklich. Ich kann den Jungen gut verstehen, ich würde mich auch so aufregen, wenn meine Mutter nie Zeit für mich hätte (und meine Mutter hat selten Zeit, aber sie kann trotzdem immer ein bisschen was für mich abzwacken).

Ich frag mich ja immer noch, wo Lore die Zeit her nimmt, einfach für ein paar Tage nach London zu fliegen, wenn sie nichtmal zwei Stuznden am Tag oder so für ihren Sohn Zeit hat.

Tja, lore, sieh zu, wie du aus der Sache wieder rauskommst, mit deiner Familie scheinst du's dir ja im Moment gründlich zu versauen.

[23 Zwerge]

hey

also das kapitel hat mir wieder gefallen
toll, dass luke lore die meinung gesagt hat
aber lore find ich blöd das will so reagiert muss sie nicht wundern!
ich bin ja gespnnt ob die wirklich nach london fliegt

ich weiß nicht was ich sagen soll, außer das mir der teil gefallen hat.
freu mich auf den nächsten

[rottie]

der teil war mal wieder super!
aber leider hat es lorelai immer noch nicht die augen geöffnet, schade. mir kommt es so vor, als wäre william sehr viel mehr erwachsener als sie.

ich bin sehr gespannt was noch passiert, dein spoiler lässt ja einiges vermuten