29.12.2004, 22:43
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29.12.2004, 22:43
so, diesmal bin ich sofort dabei wenns um feedback geht... ich will ja nich wieder nen monat warten *mich immernoch über mich selbst ärger*
zum teil:
ich liebe diesen teil!!! erst ist es so traurig, deprimierend und irgendwie absolut bedrückend... es geht lore so schlecht und weil es ihr so schlecht geht gehts auch luke schlecht.. und wenns den beiden schlecht geht, dann gehts mir schlecht
aber dann geht der teil ja weiter und er wird so
ich liebe luke, der einfach immer so wundervoll und perfekt ist... so fürsorglich und liebenswert... einfach zum knuddeln...
und lore gibt sich auch groÃe mühe.... und dann.... dann schlägt sie auch noch vor in urlaub zu fahrn
ich freu mich schon so das wird bestimmt herrlich!!
also, schnell weiter... lass mich ncih zu lang zappeln
hab dich lieb!!!
Zitat:okay, ich weià nicht mehr wie ich mich für euer supermegaliebes FB bedanken sollalso was mich angeht musst du dich nich fürs fb bedanken! ich mach das gerne, weil es immer die vollste wahrheit ist und ich mich geehrt fühle dir fb geben zu dürfen
zum teil:
ich liebe diesen teil!!! erst ist es so traurig, deprimierend und irgendwie absolut bedrückend... es geht lore so schlecht und weil es ihr so schlecht geht gehts auch luke schlecht.. und wenns den beiden schlecht geht, dann gehts mir schlecht
aber dann geht der teil ja weiter und er wird so
ich liebe luke, der einfach immer so wundervoll und perfekt ist... so fürsorglich und liebenswert... einfach zum knuddeln...
und lore gibt sich auch groÃe mühe.... und dann.... dann schlägt sie auch noch vor in urlaub zu fahrn
ich freu mich schon so das wird bestimmt herrlich!!
also, schnell weiter... lass mich ncih zu lang zappeln
hab dich lieb!!!
29.12.2004, 22:49
Se Lill hat anscheinend wieder inspiration
Zwei Teile an einem Tag
Mein Tag ist gerettet (obwohl er nimmer lang ist)
Ich kann Luke echt verstehen... Er muss ja wirklich fertig sein.
Aber Lore bekommt dann natürlich nen falschen Eindruck, ne?
Aber wunderbar, wie immer. Diese FF ist einfach nur himmlisch und und und teilweise
Alles in allem, THE BEST!
*hab dich lieb schatzi* :knuddel:
Zwei Teile an einem Tag
Mein Tag ist gerettet (obwohl er nimmer lang ist)
Ich kann Luke echt verstehen... Er muss ja wirklich fertig sein.
Aber Lore bekommt dann natürlich nen falschen Eindruck, ne?
Aber wunderbar, wie immer. Diese FF ist einfach nur himmlisch und und und teilweise
Alles in allem, THE BEST!
*hab dich lieb schatzi* :knuddel:
30.12.2004, 00:50
So, endlich habe ich diesen Teil gelesen und auch so, dass ich ihn verstanden habe
Das Gespräch zwischen Mia und Luke. Naja...uff...ich fand das ziemlich bitter. würde mia echt so über sie reden? ich meine, lore ist doch wie eine tochter für sie.
das ist aber auch mein einziger kritikpunkt. alles andere war wieder echt gelungen. *Klatsch*
wenn ich irgendwann mal so gut bin wie du, dann kann ich mich glücklich schätzen
edit: so, jetzt sag ich nochmal was dazu. klar kann ich mia verstehen, aber es klang etwas "seltsam"
Das Gespräch zwischen Mia und Luke. Naja...uff...ich fand das ziemlich bitter. würde mia echt so über sie reden? ich meine, lore ist doch wie eine tochter für sie.
das ist aber auch mein einziger kritikpunkt. alles andere war wieder echt gelungen. *Klatsch*
wenn ich irgendwann mal so gut bin wie du, dann kann ich mich glücklich schätzen
edit: so, jetzt sag ich nochmal was dazu. klar kann ich mia verstehen, aber es klang etwas "seltsam"
30.12.2004, 04:27
erm... Elü ich weià nicht was du dran seltsam findest, sorry *schäm* ich bemüh mich echt, aber ich raffs nicht, weil Mia will nur das Beste für Luke und das Beste is unbestrittener Weise Lorelai und Lore sollte mit wem drüber reden meint sie, deswegen der "professional" *g* egal...
Danke wie immer für das grandiose FB *bussis austeil* :knuddel: an alle *g*
âLorelai, when I said I wanted to go skiing, I mean to Vail or Salt Lake City, but not over the big pont to Europe, to Kitzbühel! I mean, this is too much, itâs too expensive, itâs-â Lorelai interrupted his rant by hitting him over the head with the folder containing the tickets, then walking off in the direction of the fridge, pulling out a bottle of water.
âJesus Luke, I wanna go away, far far away from all of this, why canât you accept this?â
He held his hands up in surrender âOkay, okay, Iâm sorry, I didnât wanna pick a fight with you⦠but this is so expensive⦠And I feel really bad when you pay all the expenses on this tripâ
Lorelai screwed the cap off the bottle and took a big gulp. She wiped her mouth with her index finger, then turned her eyes on him.
She walked over to him and took his hand
âHey, itâs gonna be a great vacation, we could use one after all weâve been through and I donât want you to worry about money issues⦠Iâve got it, Luke, and what good would a vacation do without you?â She looked at him lovingly.
âHey, I heard that they play Citizen Kane tonight, you wanna watch?â he interrupted the silence, surprising her with that suggestion.
âThrow in some popcorn and you got yourself a dealâ she grinned, knowing sheâd never get him to agree to popcorn unless she blackmailed him.
He only rolled his eyes at her âFine, Iâll make you some popcorn⦠As long as I donât have to eat itâ He gave her hand a last gentle squeeze and went over to the microwave, preparing her popcorn.
She grabbed her favorite blanket from the bed, putting it neatly onto the couch, standing in the middle of the room, her hands in her pockets, not knowing what to do.
âHey, can I help you?â she offered, hoping heâd give her something to do âIâm making popcorn, thatâs not that hard that Iâd need help, thank youâ
âOkaaaayâ she sighed, looking around the room, jumping from one foot to the other impatiently. He looked back at her over his shoulder and scowled.
âYou canât stand still for 2 seconds, can you?â She grinned brightly at him âNoooo I canât and thatâs why you love meâ She extended her hands for the bowl of popcorn, sitting down on the couch âNo, I love you in spite of thatâ he mumbled to himself.
âHeeeey! I heard that!â She swatted his arm playfully, spilling some popcorn onto the floor. She looked at him apologetically, batting her eyelashes
âOopsi, clumsy meâ¦.â He gave her his best you-annoy-me-but-I-wonât-give-you-the-satisfaction-of-reacting-the-way-you-want-me-to and grabbed the remote. She only extended her hand, commanding him to hand it over immediately in a very stern voice. He held it out to her, knowing she wouldnât rest until she had it. She clicked on the TV, zapping around a little until she had found the right station.
She wrapped herself in âherâ blanket (she had acquired it immediately after she had spent the first night at his place, calling it hers ever since) and scooted closer to him, putting her head on his shoulder, offering him a corner of the blanket silently. He gladly took it, not daring to wrap her arms around her, this being the first real physical contact ever since. He just didnât want to push her.
Lorelai kept stuffing popcorn into her mouth, munching away on it happily, almost falling asleep on his shoulder. The movie wasnât that entertaining so she wondered if she could annoy Luke into eating some popcorn. A smile tugged at the corner of her lips as she offered the bowl to him, never taking her eyes off the screen. He didnât catch on the first time she tried so she shook the bowl a little, trying to get his attention.
âWhat?â she felt his voice against her ear before she actually heard him âWant some?â she asked innocently.
He merely snorted and replied monotonously âYou really thing Iâd eat that?â gesturing to the bowl, he almost knocked it out of her hand
âWatch it, this is sacred! You sure you donât want some?â
âYes, now be quiet, I wanna watch the movieâ he hushed her, slightly annoyed.
Lorelai smiled to herself. She was getting there.
âCome on, at least try itâ she whined.
âNoâ he said flatly âItâs unhealthy, itâs fat and I donât wanna clog my arteries with that junk, okay?â
She sat up next to him, grabbing one piece of popcorn, holding it out to him âOne piece, come onâ He shook his head resolutely
âDonât be such a baby, Lukeâ She touched the popcorn to his lips, waiting patiently for him to open it.
But he wasnât gonna give in this easily.
âLuuuuuke just eat it, for me?â She smiled sweetly, but no effect. She nudged his lips gently âIâm not gonna give up, you know that, might be better for you if youâd just eat it nowâ He gave her an exasperated look, then opened his mouth.
She quickly pushed the popcorn in before he changed his mind and was about to pull her fingers back as he closed his lips around them. Keeping his eyes locked on hers for any sign of discomfort from her side he gently licked the salt off her fingers.
She swallowed hard, removing her fingers shakily, looking away.
He hung his head. âIâm sorry, Lore, really. I shouldnât have done that⦠I donât know why I did it, I-â
He almost cried as he realized what he did to her, but she cut him off by saying quietly âI understand, Luke, I know itâs hard for you, but I canât jump over my own shadow you know?â
She put her head on his shoulder again, closing her eyes. She felt so safe when she was with him, she knew it sounded cheesy and corny, but she felt ⦠home.
She stroked her fingers over the back of his hand, contemplating her next move. Was she ready? She opted for âyesâ, took his arm and put it around her shoulders. He looked down at her, surprised at her move, but soon relaxed into her and put his head atop hers.
They soon were fast asleep, cuddled together on the couch, the TV showing the test picture of the TV station.
Danke wie immer für das grandiose FB *bussis austeil* :knuddel: an alle *g*
âLorelai, when I said I wanted to go skiing, I mean to Vail or Salt Lake City, but not over the big pont to Europe, to Kitzbühel! I mean, this is too much, itâs too expensive, itâs-â Lorelai interrupted his rant by hitting him over the head with the folder containing the tickets, then walking off in the direction of the fridge, pulling out a bottle of water.
âJesus Luke, I wanna go away, far far away from all of this, why canât you accept this?â
He held his hands up in surrender âOkay, okay, Iâm sorry, I didnât wanna pick a fight with you⦠but this is so expensive⦠And I feel really bad when you pay all the expenses on this tripâ
Lorelai screwed the cap off the bottle and took a big gulp. She wiped her mouth with her index finger, then turned her eyes on him.
She walked over to him and took his hand
âHey, itâs gonna be a great vacation, we could use one after all weâve been through and I donât want you to worry about money issues⦠Iâve got it, Luke, and what good would a vacation do without you?â She looked at him lovingly.
âHey, I heard that they play Citizen Kane tonight, you wanna watch?â he interrupted the silence, surprising her with that suggestion.
âThrow in some popcorn and you got yourself a dealâ she grinned, knowing sheâd never get him to agree to popcorn unless she blackmailed him.
He only rolled his eyes at her âFine, Iâll make you some popcorn⦠As long as I donât have to eat itâ He gave her hand a last gentle squeeze and went over to the microwave, preparing her popcorn.
She grabbed her favorite blanket from the bed, putting it neatly onto the couch, standing in the middle of the room, her hands in her pockets, not knowing what to do.
âHey, can I help you?â she offered, hoping heâd give her something to do âIâm making popcorn, thatâs not that hard that Iâd need help, thank youâ
âOkaaaayâ she sighed, looking around the room, jumping from one foot to the other impatiently. He looked back at her over his shoulder and scowled.
âYou canât stand still for 2 seconds, can you?â She grinned brightly at him âNoooo I canât and thatâs why you love meâ She extended her hands for the bowl of popcorn, sitting down on the couch âNo, I love you in spite of thatâ he mumbled to himself.
âHeeeey! I heard that!â She swatted his arm playfully, spilling some popcorn onto the floor. She looked at him apologetically, batting her eyelashes
âOopsi, clumsy meâ¦.â He gave her his best you-annoy-me-but-I-wonât-give-you-the-satisfaction-of-reacting-the-way-you-want-me-to and grabbed the remote. She only extended her hand, commanding him to hand it over immediately in a very stern voice. He held it out to her, knowing she wouldnât rest until she had it. She clicked on the TV, zapping around a little until she had found the right station.
She wrapped herself in âherâ blanket (she had acquired it immediately after she had spent the first night at his place, calling it hers ever since) and scooted closer to him, putting her head on his shoulder, offering him a corner of the blanket silently. He gladly took it, not daring to wrap her arms around her, this being the first real physical contact ever since. He just didnât want to push her.
Lorelai kept stuffing popcorn into her mouth, munching away on it happily, almost falling asleep on his shoulder. The movie wasnât that entertaining so she wondered if she could annoy Luke into eating some popcorn. A smile tugged at the corner of her lips as she offered the bowl to him, never taking her eyes off the screen. He didnât catch on the first time she tried so she shook the bowl a little, trying to get his attention.
âWhat?â she felt his voice against her ear before she actually heard him âWant some?â she asked innocently.
He merely snorted and replied monotonously âYou really thing Iâd eat that?â gesturing to the bowl, he almost knocked it out of her hand
âWatch it, this is sacred! You sure you donât want some?â
âYes, now be quiet, I wanna watch the movieâ he hushed her, slightly annoyed.
Lorelai smiled to herself. She was getting there.
âCome on, at least try itâ she whined.
âNoâ he said flatly âItâs unhealthy, itâs fat and I donât wanna clog my arteries with that junk, okay?â
She sat up next to him, grabbing one piece of popcorn, holding it out to him âOne piece, come onâ He shook his head resolutely
âDonât be such a baby, Lukeâ She touched the popcorn to his lips, waiting patiently for him to open it.
But he wasnât gonna give in this easily.
âLuuuuuke just eat it, for me?â She smiled sweetly, but no effect. She nudged his lips gently âIâm not gonna give up, you know that, might be better for you if youâd just eat it nowâ He gave her an exasperated look, then opened his mouth.
She quickly pushed the popcorn in before he changed his mind and was about to pull her fingers back as he closed his lips around them. Keeping his eyes locked on hers for any sign of discomfort from her side he gently licked the salt off her fingers.
She swallowed hard, removing her fingers shakily, looking away.
He hung his head. âIâm sorry, Lore, really. I shouldnât have done that⦠I donât know why I did it, I-â
He almost cried as he realized what he did to her, but she cut him off by saying quietly âI understand, Luke, I know itâs hard for you, but I canât jump over my own shadow you know?â
She put her head on his shoulder again, closing her eyes. She felt so safe when she was with him, she knew it sounded cheesy and corny, but she felt ⦠home.
She stroked her fingers over the back of his hand, contemplating her next move. Was she ready? She opted for âyesâ, took his arm and put it around her shoulders. He looked down at her, surprised at her move, but soon relaxed into her and put his head atop hers.
They soon were fast asleep, cuddled together on the couch, the TV showing the test picture of the TV station.
30.12.2004, 04:38
Das ist doch mal eine wundervolle Gute - Nacht - Geschichte
Hast du gaaaaanz toll gemacht
Endlich herrscht wieder ein bissche Harmonie. Das Lore noch nicht darüber hinweg ist, ist ja klar, aber die beiden wieder so zu sehen
Einfach traumhaft.
Schreib schön weiter so süÃe!
*hab dich lieb*
*knuddel* :knuddel:
30.12.2004, 12:27
hach lilli...*schmacht*
das war wieder ein extrem genialer teil(nachdem ich ja zu dumm war, den letzten zu verstehen )
es ist einfach wunderbar, dass luke und lore sich wieder etwas näher kommen und lore den ersten schritt macht, alles hinter sich zu lassen.
und wieder muss ich sagen, dass du es immer wieder schaffst mich mit deiner art zu schreiben zu beeindrucken. so gefühlvoll und du denkst einfach an alles.
ich meine, bei genug anderen geschichten wäre sofort wieder "friedefreudeeierkuchen", aber bei du berücksíchtigst wirklich, was lore schlimmes erlebt hat und denkst echt an die gefühle.
was soll ich mehr sagen? deine ff ist einfach super spitzenmässig!
das war wieder ein extrem genialer teil(nachdem ich ja zu dumm war, den letzten zu verstehen )
es ist einfach wunderbar, dass luke und lore sich wieder etwas näher kommen und lore den ersten schritt macht, alles hinter sich zu lassen.
und wieder muss ich sagen, dass du es immer wieder schaffst mich mit deiner art zu schreiben zu beeindrucken. so gefühlvoll und du denkst einfach an alles.
ich meine, bei genug anderen geschichten wäre sofort wieder "friedefreudeeierkuchen", aber bei du berücksíchtigst wirklich, was lore schlimmes erlebt hat und denkst echt an die gefühle.
was soll ich mehr sagen? deine ff ist einfach super spitzenmässig!
30.12.2004, 12:49
mmmmmmhhhhhhh
das ist einfach toll!!!
aber das warst du uns auch schuldig, nach dme ganzen stress und ärger und so...
ach es ist sooooooooooooo romantisch... und das um die uhrzeit...
also wirklcih einfahc nur süÃ!!!!
und zu deinem schreibstil oder so muss cih ja wohl nichts mehr sagen, oder willst due snoch einmal hören???
ich wäre übrigens sehr zufrieden, wenn du uns immer mit so tollen teilen für unser FB danken würdest!!!
das ist einfach toll!!!
aber das warst du uns auch schuldig, nach dme ganzen stress und ärger und so...
ach es ist sooooooooooooo romantisch... und das um die uhrzeit...
also wirklcih einfahc nur süÃ!!!!
und zu deinem schreibstil oder so muss cih ja wohl nichts mehr sagen, oder willst due snoch einmal hören???
ich wäre übrigens sehr zufrieden, wenn du uns immer mit so tollen teilen für unser FB danken würdest!!!
30.12.2004, 14:11
das war mal wieder soooooooo toll!! du wirst mal autorin!! :lach:
einfach genial!!
einfach genial!!
30.12.2004, 17:03
wow ... einfach wieder super geil !!! der letzte teil war total süss, typisch lore ;-) aber luke tut mir auch leid, ist mit sicherheit ne s c h e i s s situation ...
naja, aber du hast mal wieder saubere arbeit geleistet ! einfach
toll, wie du schreibst, das muss ich einfach immer wieder sagen
warte gespannt auf einen neuen teil, aber jetzt muss ich erstmal
gg gucken ...
LG, DG
naja, aber du hast mal wieder saubere arbeit geleistet ! einfach
toll, wie du schreibst, das muss ich einfach immer wieder sagen
warte gespannt auf einen neuen teil, aber jetzt muss ich erstmal
gg gucken ...
LG, DG